heres a weird music video i shot. it was a simple shoot, i just told me editor to do what he pleases with it since it was a freebie.
And heres a commercial we made for a contest. If you all voted for it that would be great. :)
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heres a weird music video i shot. it was a simple shoot, i just told me editor to do what he pleases with it since it was a freebie.
And heres a commercial we made for a contest. If you all voted for it that would be great. :)
would love some feedback if possible. Ive got my own critiques. but have at it, good and bad.
Hey Domenic- That video is cool. Trippy for sure. I really like stuff thats different and daring like that. Instead of doing something we've all seen many times before, you took a simple setup and did something creative under an obviously tight/zero budget. Nice job. Perhaps the guy at the controls could have been a little more active or changed up his position for some variety as well, otherwise it worked well for me. Props to your editor.
I agree. The music video was refreshing. Maybe a tad too many gimmicks for my taste, but I thought it was unique and interesting. I loved the style and look... nice work dude!
The commercial was cool too. Only shots that bothered me were the shots of the woman doing the wash. Everything else looked great, but those shots screamed low budget. Overall, I thought both your projects were solid. Keep doing what you are doing. Peace.
Domenic, you shooting these on Contax glass? :)
The music video looks, and I love the commercial. The outdoor shots in particular are spot on.
hey nick, The contax lenses did shoot the laundry commercial. The other i believe was just the tokina 11-16. And ive dp'd two shoots other than this with actual budgets and the contax lenses are amazing. Cant wait to show the next few projects.
@clint, what part of that screamed low budget? or what exactly about it? I would love to never have that come across again. Dont do many product commercials so wasnt sure how to shoot it.
I really enjoyed the music video- fancy editing there, but it fits the style well.
The notes I have for the commercial would be that I enjoyed the handheld shots in the beginning. It was a bit jarring to go directly into a dolly (which holds a little long IMO) and then a locked off shot of the pouring of the detergent. Didn't fit the flow of the edit for me.
I could also tell that you shot at a higher resolution because it was much sharper than the rest of the footage. That could be fixed with some desaturating and softening.
I would say the only shot that should be locked is the beauty shot of the product with logo at the end.
great thanks for the feedback doug :)
Domenic, two notes on the commercial.
1) I would say the Mom/Washing scene looks a little more "low budget" because of the art direction. The outdoors shots look classy, eternal. But inside, its more predictably Suburban. I would look next time for as unique a location as possible. The wood cabinets in particular are a bit generic/Ikea. That would be my guess as to what Clint is seeing
2) Now for my wheel-house, the edit. Next time you cut a spot like this, pay special attention to how THE MUSIC ENDS. Don't let it just fade out like that, and just....die. Really listen to the track, and make it STING OUT. Listen to the track, and a lot of them, if they are pro stock music, will give you a natural "tada" end that you can cut out and stick at the end. If not...find a bridge that does something similar.
Now its perfectly acceptable to STING OUT at the end...But a trick we do in PROMO a lot is actually create the STING OUT "before" the ENDPAGE/PRODUCT page. Does that make sense? That way your spot ends dramatically...and then with a drone you bring in your product page.
Not sure if this makes sense....(its late...)
Next time you watch a good trailer, pay attention to the end...You'll notice it ENDS and then.."HARRY POTTER...etc". Over silence...
Hope this helps. Good work though.
3) Also, if you don't have access to a PRO Vo person, just use title cards. Have one graphic at the top that says "EVERY HOME"...and then later another that says "DESERVES A CHANCE"...and then a third "TO BE GREEN". That can drive the message very effectively, and alleviate even having to use VO. VO is very tricky, unless its someone awesome it can be a drag. We use titles a lot in our spots.
Hope this helps...
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